Third Feedback

So a couple of days ago I went to my third feedback session. In the session we discussed my second storyboard and first test shots. Here was what was advised...

• When letter is read zoom in a little so the audience can see what is written. 
• Is the letter good or bad news?
• Could simplify the whole sequence by just showing a conversion between the two flats using letters posted under each others doors. Maybe at the end there is a small revelation but not necessarily needed. Photographs slotted into two last letters to one another. So one shot would be a letter under one door then switched to there being a letter under the other flat door.
• Could scrap whole idea of lost family connection, and have a row between neighbours and show reconciliation?
• Newspaper cut outs- threats?
• Make audience work, they can fill gaps.