Second feedback

A few days ago I went to my second feedback session. I took with me the storyboard and shot list (seen a few posts below). Last time, the fire exit I planned to have opposite the flat seen in the given photo proved the problem, as normally a fire exit wouldn't be situated directly opposite, so I went back and thought of a simalar story but one that involved a flat opposite instead of a fire exit. Here was what was said about this storyboard/ shot list and suggestions on how to develop/ carry it forward to photographs.

• At the ending of the narrative the two flat owners may not meet, this will build on the mystery aspect of the narrative.
• May want to have writing/ information on the back of the two photos, so when the photographs are held together by the flat owner, she will turn them around to find even more significance- this may be the date or location of the family photograph.
• Need a better reason for Flat Owner B to leave her door open.
• Photograph may re jog a memory for Flat Owner A.
• Sentimental object seen instead of a photograph?
• Consider context further.
•  Letter to make Flat Owner A suspicious of Flat Owner B's room?
• Photograph dropped in doorway instead of being pinned on a board. 
• Start to photograph ideas for next feedback. 
• May want to simplify the narrative slightly.